Friday, February 10, 2012

Critique Partner Blogfest

Today starts a weeks worth of amazing blogfests. I'll try and keep a running tab of links at the top of each so the different blog participants can find the one they're looking for.

First up is Loralie's Critique Partner blogfest. Follow the link to find the other posts. At first I wasn't going to do this because I don't have a finished novel ready for critiquing. But I will. And that's why I decided to join up. Maybe there will be someone else who needs emails asking, "Hey where's the next few chapter?"

Anyway, here are my answers to some suggested questions from Loralie to help in our search for a critique partner.

  • Genre: YA contemporary fantasy
  • Title: Faerie Wings
  • Current status: 34K rough draft, 2/3 complete. The first chapter has been rewritten and I'm working through the rest before finishing the story. I got a bit off track with my focus and am fixing it.
  • Feedback needed:  General thoughts. Is the story line smooth and easy to follow. Does the voice match that of a 17-18 year old? Highlight the things you really like, anything that takes you out of the story, questions you have as you read (these help me the most because then I can see if you are asking the right questions in the right places), did I start in the right place (this is debatable even now), is the end satisfying, any unanswered questions that bug you. That kind of thing. I don't need a line edit because what I send will not be the final draft. And probably loaded with passive and -ly words.
  • The Pitch
    Everything you’ve ever heard about faeries is a lie.
    Lies they told to keep us from learning the truth.
    What is the truth?
    They live among us, sentenced to watch over and nurture their greatest mistake.
    Ryanne Killian doesn’t believe in faerie tales, and yet all the eyes of the Fae are watching her–hoping she will be the one to set them free.

    • The first 500 words: I actually don't have access to my computer at the moment (it's being repaired), and my hubby's computer is so old it won't recognize the external hard drive when I plug it in. So, here is the first 250 words or so that I posted on a webpage (see tab at the top) I created for this idea. (Come back tomorrow for another snippet from this novel for the YAmore blogfest.
    “If I do this, you’re going to owe me big time.” I pulled my hair up into a ponytail and stared at Kevin. He stood on my porch in his letterman's jacket looking like the all-American homecoming god without a clue.

    “I knew I could count on you, Ry.” He slapped me on the shoulder like one of the guys and headed down the steps.

    “I still think it’s stupid. A girl shouldn’t be best man!” I yelled from the door as Kevin reached his car.

    “But you’re my best friend. I’ll have Jessie call you. And don’t forget, it’s right after graduation.”

    “How could I forget that?” I mumbled and he drove away.

    What an idiot. Did he even know I was a girl? I was going to be the laughing stock of our graduating class, but it didn’t really matter. I would do anything he asked. I always had. Look what it got me. Best Man at his wedding. As if that wasn’t bad enough, he was marrying Jessie. The cliche cheer-leading Barbie wanna-be.


    1. i love your story. i might ask for you to trade in a few months if you want/still need =)

    2. By All That is Holy...

      That logline is OMGosh-Perfect.

      I've read Faerie Wings and for anyone thinking about trading with Charity, she is a great CP.

      1. I figured out what the problem was with what you read. I need to tell Carter's story simultaneously with Ry's. :) Its going to be so much better!

    3. I would love to read this. Your voice is snappy and your pitch is compelling. I can either take a look when you're all done, or I'm happy to read as you go since you're so far into it.

    4. This is a great way to find a critique partner - good luck!

    5. I really like this piece! I had never ever thought of a girl as being a best man. It's fresh. It's original. And it instantly grabbed me because of that. It's an awesome awesome awesome idea :)) I'm excited for this story.

    6. I love the premise. Very original. Great voice. I'd be interested in reading whenever or whatever parts you want.

    7. Great writing!
      Just wanted to stop in and remind you about the That's YAmore Blogfest starting tomorrow. I'm looking forward to reading your excerpt. Is it from this piece?

    8. I really enjoyed reading this :) and hope you find a great match.
      PS: you left me wondering: is she going to get the guy in the end? married or not? :)

    9. LOVE your pitch. Usually at the first mention of a faery I start tuning out, but I like that you immediately address this isn't a typical faery story.

      Since the excerpt is so short, I'm not sure how faeries fit into your story which sounds more like contemporary YA. Wondering if hints of paranormal could be worked in (maybe it is in a paragraph coming up).

      Also, this may be nitpicky, but do kids still refer to letterman jackets? I know they still exist, and although the term is technically correct, maybe something like "school jacket" would sound more current? or varsity jacket? I would interview a kid and get it straight :)

      1. Wanted to add I'm probably not the best match to critique BUT I added your blog to follow, and I appreciate your comment on my story. thanks :)

      2. 'K, just for reference purposes so you don't have to go find a kid, people at my school still say letterman's jacket.

    10. Why didn't I know about this sooner? I have two wonderful critique partners already, but one has just recently obtained an agent so is very busy. I could do for a few more...

      I like this new starting place, Charity. ^^

    11. Unfortunately I don't read YA (long forgotten my teens, sigh!), but I wish you all the best! :-)


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