Tuesday, June 8, 2010

Goal for Today

Last week I entered Rachelle Gardner's One Sentence Summary contest. She had hundreds of entries. I wasn't picked as a winner, but today she gave great critiques of some of them. Mine was critiqued (the second one)--which feels like a win when you read the other critiques. Here is my one liner and her advice:

When a lonely scientist’s nightmares become reality, she must embrace her magical abilities to save her planet from an invading alien force.

I don't know what the nightmares are about, there is no clue as to the nature of her magical abilities, and the alien force could be darn near anything. Just a few carefully chosen words could make this more visual and draw my interest.
That actually excites and gives me something to focus on. So, my goal for today is choose some stronger words. Step, by tiny step--I might just get somewhere!

8 comments:

  1. Yep. That's what I keep hearing. Be specific. I think if we keep that in mind, we'll get there! Slowly ... lol

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  2. That's great that your's got critiqued. That's some solid advice you received. :-)

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  3. I agree with Mary. Very solid advise!

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  4. I've got nothing to add. her advice is great :-)

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  5. I know! It feels like a battle sometimes to get noticed enough to receive some advice. I'm very grateful she picked mine to critique. I think the advice is spot on, and wonder "why didn't I think of that before?"

    Nice to get a nudge in the right direction when we need it.

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  6. I'm glad you took this so well Charity! I think she gave a brilliant critique and I'm glad to see you are ready to test it all out and take the leap of faith! Good luck!

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  7. Good job following directions! I realized that in my haste to enter, I entered a 2 sentence blurb!

    Good critique. Will you post your new improved blurb when you find it?

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  8. Woo hoo! I love the one sentence summary. I want to read it when you've revised! =) Please. *hands in begging position*

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